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Could use some oil in my training wheels - Prince Adeyemi - 10-14-2022
1. A King's Address - Open Call
2. A Kingdom at Hand - vs Finn Kuhn Warfare
3. Who are you? - vs Angelica Vaughn Savage
4. Striving to Perfection - Vs Gravy vs HGH Savage TV Title 1
5. Who I Am. - vs Gravy vs HGH Savage TV Title 2
6. Weight on my shoulder - vs JM Jnr 1
7. Why do you fight? - vs Tommy Wish
8. Reduced expectations. - vs JM Jnr 2
Hey y'all!! Appreciate your feedback, gonna keep this thread as updated as I can with my ongoing RPs, glad to take feedback for any of them, please lemme know where I can improve - some honest brutality is always good.
Reading through some of you guys' work has me very excited to go up against some of these names.
RE: Could use some oil in my training wheels - Prince Adeyemi - 10-22-2022
Bump
RE: Could use some oil in my training wheels - Mark Flynn - 10-24-2022
Taking a look, one sec...
EDIT: Okay, finished reading.
Solid stuff. The Trash Talk is consistent in its messaging, which makes me feel like Isaiah is laser-focused on his goal. I also like the repetition of the 'I am an heir' point. In a world of an inflated egos, it's interesting to see a character who believes there time is approaching, but not here yet. I'm interested to see what role the Isaiah King Corporation plays in Isaiah's story going forward.
RE: Could use some oil in my training wheels - Prince Adeyemi - 10-25-2022
(10-24-2022, 06:54 AM)Mark Flynn Said: Taking a look, one sec...
EDIT: Okay, finished reading.
Solid stuff. The Trash Talk is consistent in its messaging, which makes me feel like Isaiah is laser-focused on his goal. I also like the repetition of the 'I am an heir' point. In a world of an inflated egos, it's interesting to see a character who believes there time is approaching, but not here yet. I'm interested to see what role the Isaiah King Corporation plays in Isaiah's story going forward.
Personally a big fan of Macho Man and Bray's work on the mic over the years, not sure if those inspirations are clear. Macho was always wonderful at repetition, and having a clear, consistent idea in his promos even if he was coked out of his mind. Bray has a slightly more eerie unpredictability about him, making you believe one thing all the way to the end of a promo or series of promos before you realise what his point really is.
I think balancing the two out, being consistent while aloof enough to be entertaining throughout a promo is what I'm tying to master.
RE: Could use some oil in my training wheels - Prince Adeyemi - 11-12-2022
A quick ol' bump
Appreciate you guys' time!