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Constructive Criticism/Compliments - John Lewis - 01-29-2019
So it's been close to seven years since I've sat down and wrote an RP. I'm curious to have some of my fellow XWF handler's opinions on my first two pieces of work.
Constructive Criticism/Compliments - Corey Smith - 01-29-2019
I'll bite, but I'm not a judge here or anything.
I read "How to Beat a Mutant." It wasn't bad, but it wasn't super noteworthy either. It is kind of interesting to see characters break down, from a tactical perspective, how to beat someone. But overall the whole thing left me feeling kinda cold and like I didn't have much of a feel for what the characters were all about. Try to write by giving each character a certain "voice", a personality, a motive, something that makes them stand out. You don't have to write a bajillion pages of unrelated backstory, just try to have a more concrete picture of how someone would talk or sound to make the dialogue pop a little more, I suppose.
Hope that helps. Also, I'm not a stickler for it, but color coding the dialogue seems to be a thing here.
Constructive Criticism/Compliments - John Lewis - 01-29-2019
Thank you Lux!
Constructive Criticism/Compliments - drezdin5788 - 01-29-2019
Im 35 now but 20 years I've been efedding. And for me you said that its been 7 years since you sat down and spit our a promo, i think its not so much the promo, its more along the lines of thr rust you have and how you kinda went all over the place...Oh and dont forget to color code your promos to.
Constructive Criticism/Compliments - John Lewis - 01-29-2019
20 years? Wow. We're you in XWF in the mid 2000's?
http://worldpro.proboards.com/thread/6767/roy-lee-rumble-1
This was probably one of my last rp's.
Constructive Criticism/Compliments - drezdin5788 - 01-29-2019
Whoa whoa whoa whoa whoa whoa whoa whoa whoa hold up a sec there. Specifically here in the xwf its 5 years , 2 years as a jobber not yet on a roster. But three years in all as apart of this company on the roster full time. Other then that, first 5 off and on, the other 15 years full time. While Most of them closed it doors, only two im in that still has its doors open.
Constructive Criticism/Compliments - John Lewis - 01-29-2019
Oh okay I get you. Well I knew you were a veteran when I read your RP's.
Constructive Criticism/Compliments - drezdin5788 - 01-29-2019
Lets just say im like no other person who does their promos.